There was a girl called Evie. She was an only child and she was living with her mum because her dad moved out when Evie was two years old. Her Mum had a secret . She was hiding from Evie for a long time….
Evie and her mum aren't ordinary people. They are from a world called Mythical Blue. She and her mum moved to Mythical Blue when Evie was little because Evie’s mum didn't feel safe in the real world.
They had a house in Mythical Blue and it was called the tree of life and they lived inside the trunk and the trees leafs dangled down to the ground. The trunk of the tree had an orange eye on it and you would go up to the eye and it would tell you in your mind the answer to your problem.
When Evie was little and they moved to Mythical Blue Evie found a bunny.
The bunny had a bell around her neck. So Evie called her Bell and ever since that has been Evies best friend.
One day Bell the bunny and Evie went for a walk in the enchanted forest and they saw a little bag hanging on a tree branch so they grabbed it off the branch and sat down with it and opened it. It was pixie dust…..
They didn't know what to do with it and so they took it home and showed Evie's mum. In the Mythical Blue world pixie dust is really rare to be continued
The End.
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This is a lovely mystery narrative. I’m looking forward to finding out what is going to happen next.
Next steps - Capital letters for names (aka proper nouns).
Increasing impact on the reader by using sentences of varied length.
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